2007年11月27日 星期二
Yesterday I had a date with my friend. I have been known her since we were elementary school students. We went to the same junior high school and senior high school, but now we are in different universities. Since we are college students, we usually have a date once a month or two months. Because both of us are busy with our own studies and part-time jobs. Sometimes we chat on line or send messages to each other but not very often. Though we seldom communicate to each other, we can talk a lot when we have dates. We talk about the homework, school life, school reports, friends,…..etc. We can talk everything of our lives without any concealment. I cherish the friendship with her very much because it is lucky to have a close friend.
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"Because both of us are busy with our own studies and part-time jobs." ---> Both of us are busy with our own studies and part-time jobs.
"I cherish the friendship with her very much" or you can say " I cherish our friendship very much"
Your first two sentences can be combined into a single and more economical sentence: "Yesterday I had a date with a girl I've known since elementary school." Your two sentences have 19 words. My single sentence has 13 words. That's 32% shorter. Shorter is better because it saves time. Shorter isn't better when it removes words that give important information. None of the words I removed give useful information.
Your third sentence can also be cut: "We attended the same junior and senior high schools, but we attend different universities." Yours is 19 words and mine is 14 words, 27% shorter. Overall, I've saved 29% by cutting 9 words.
"once every month or two" is both shorter and easier to understand.
"communicate with each other" is correct.
"We can talk openly about everything in our lives." This is idiomatic and natural -- and shorter.
"because I am lucky" is normal.
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